Picture Idea or Commentary Line

We are in a desert. A reporter is obviously preparing for a broadcast. We sense activity behind him. An assistant comes up with a film clapboard, calls "Take one," and marks it. The reporter now addresses his audience, as if in a live broadcast.

Reporter (rough commentary outline): Today we celebrate ten years of peace between Israel and its neighbors. It's fitting that this simple ceremony is here, because the original treaty was signed at this spot 10 years ago. Audiences will remember that that was the culmination of years of work. . . . But what a day that was. . . .

Rejoicing in mosques, Today delegates from churches, and Western Wall Lebanon, Syria, Jordan,

Saudi Arabia, and Israel are revisiting this spot to renew and reaffirm the commitment to peace made a decade ago.

Looking back we are all amazed at the changes. Given the social, economic, and cultural benefits of this last decade how could we have been so foolish as to wait so long?

An assistant runs up and bangs the clapboard. It is the end of the take. Obviously we have been watching a film rehearsal. We are still in the desert. The reporter wipes his glasses, sits casually on a table, and again addresses the audience, this time much more informally, almost as a personal chat.

Reporter: Yes, just a film. Just a created scene. But a utopian fantasy . . . ? No! What you have just seen could well be true in a few years' time. The elements for change, the elements for peace are in place.

We see cars with diplomatic flags emerging thru the desert haze.

Figures emerge from car.

But we've talked so long about war we've forgotten what peace might be like, what it might bring.

The diplomats' cars are What we'd like to do in seen. Close up of flags. this film is stretch the imagination a bit . . . take a Jules Verne or H. G. Wells trip into the next few years and try to envisage what this world, what this turbulent Middle East, would be like with a real peace, what it would be like in say . . . 2000, the year 2004 or in 2010.

The treatment then went on to review a little bit of the history of the wars and battles in the region (illustrated with archive footage) before we moved into the documentary fantasy. I enjoyed writing the script, and it was accepted with enthusiasm. The sponsor, however, then got cold feet. It was too controversial a subject—a good script, but maybe for production "next" year. And that's the way it goes.

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